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7 minutes of heaven
(Akatsuki Flavor)
Itachi!
A/N : I know most of these have a lot of clichés and all o well XD I been trying to really do my research for these Akatsuki members and their personality so I can get it right! I know a lot of people like Itachi so I hope you like it~ and sorry for not updating a lot I recently had been sick for almost a week. Now school is really taking my time I sometimes stay up late. I’m getting wayyy out of topic now .-. Itachi will probulary be alittle bit OOC.
Enjoy!  lol
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You were scared which person in this very room you were about to pick. You guess it was all in fate’s hands now. ‘Why am I making a big deal out of this anyway____! It’s just a game right!’ you thought but the feeling still didn’t seem to want to shake off of you. It was like an annoying shadow you couldn’t get rid of no matter what solutions you tried. “Hmp” you said determined as your fingers slipped though many objects. “Ha!” you said as you almost threw out your chosen item.
Tobi took away the hat sitting down himself. You have chosen a necklace. It seemed very normal looking not really any special features imprinted on it.  It had 3 very dull silver rings attached to it. You raise it in the air as you showed everyone like you were showing off your “prize”. “Isn’t that Itachi’s?” Kisname said as he recognized it in less than a second.
“Where is Itachi anyway un?” Deidara asked looking around the room. “That is mine indeed” A voice said as it ringed though your ear drums. You stood shocked as he stood right behind your back with a calm presence.
‘When…when did he get here?’ You thought not sure what to think of. “Ah I knew I was right” Kisname said glad of his small victory which didn’t really mean anything to this point. Itachi already started walking to the closet in his usually slow pace. ‘Man this probualry won’t be much fun since he seems so cold.
Before you knew it he was already leaving you behind. “Hey wait for me aleast!” you shouted as you trailed after him. “I guess this one won’t be as interesting as I hoped so un” Deidara muttered. “Hmp why are you down you’re the one not being locked up in a closet” Sasori said cant believing his weird being.
You finally stepped inside the closet and the door closed behind you instantly. You didn’t except the room to be so dark as you thought you were aleast have a small source of light. Things seemed very awkward and boring as you look just stood in silence.  You leaned against the wall which the cold metal rubbed against you already chilled skin. “Oh here’s your necklace back” You said as you still had it in your hand. He just stared at you as he claimed it back. ‘No thank you?’ you thought getting more annoyed by the second.
His red sharigan eyes stood out against the darkness almost like a glow stick. Those eyes amazed you.  ‘Ugh I hate how i can’t seem to hate him!’ you said as you tried to remain your anger. You kept finding so many things to like well except for the obvious anti-social act.
“Itachi why do you have to be so cold!?” “Aleast try to talk or something!” You yelled getting angry at his stubborn to cooperate at all. “Why did you even play along with this game“ You said while tears rolled down your cheeks. ‘Why am…I such a crybaby?’ you thought as you hated the salty tears you tasted. You were surprised as soft lips met yours stopping your sentence incomplete.
‘What’s…What’s happening?’ you thought as the tears stopped only shortly as a new unknown emotion empowered you. “I don’t like seeing people cry escially for a girl like you” He said in a tender voice. Goosebumps spread all over to your body at his statement.  You blushed as you looked away afraid of showing yourself from your puffy red eyes and now blushing face.
You couldn’t think of a comeback now. “I think I may know a method to stop those tears of yours” he said as he wiped a single drop off your cheek. His fingers hanged on to your face crangling it. He kissed you again as it did worked.  You kissed back as you were filled with joy at Itachi’s new self. You had to tiptoe to reach aleast near to his height.
You broke apart from his behalf as you secretly wanted more. “I guess it did work hm?” He said. “It sure did” you said barely been able to say this. Now you were the one to make the move as you almost roughly kissed him hanging on his neck. His fingers traveled to your hips in a slow movement. ‘Who knew Itachi was such a romantic?’ you thought.
“One minute warning!” Kisname said from the outside world. ‘Well one minute is enough right?’ you thought not breaking the kiss just yet. He didn’t try to do the same either as you too were almost lost in you make out session. “Time’s up!” They yelled as the door swaged wide open to all making you feel expose.
‘Man 7 minutes does past by!’ you thought. Both of you separated from each other to the other side of the closet but you could tell they already knew what happened. “Wow Itachi doesn’t seem as heartless as I thought” Sasuke said as this was probulary the first thing he was spoken since the very beginning of the game. As you walked out of the room you were met by Itachi hand. “Here you should probulay keep it” he whispered in your ear. He out the object inside your hand as you held it almost guessing what I could be.
‘Man now I’m sure glad I played this game’ you thought smiling.
Later you realized what you held. It was his necklace. “Itachi…” you uttered as you could still feel his lips on yours like if it happened seconds before.
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A/N
Omg I swear I'm soo not used to this kind of thing >///< But I do enjoy writing it of course!~ and I guess I should rate this one T? I know some of these characters are kind of OOC since I’m pretty sure none of the Akatsuki would actually play this game XD Okay maybe only Hidan ROTFL ( I been putting a lot of A/Ns recently! O.o) I’m surprised at myself that the ending! *bows* XD RTOFL
OMG you got Itachi Uchiha! O.O I rate this T (Not that bad to be under the Mature filter)

Intro ---->[link]

Sasori ----> [link]

Tobi ----> [link]
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah yes, Itachi, one of my favourites :)
I really loved your storyline here. Fits Itachi well to first be the cold guy and then show his warmer side in the closet, where (next to) no one can see them. I also like how you come up with a new description for the start of the story each time (which is not quite easy, cause in the end the person always has to pick some item from the head. So very well done!). If you want, you could remove that last sentence of the intro (You after 10 seconds pick up a…), because than it will fit even better with the different starts if the reader goes through them in a different order.

But please please please check your spelling and grammar and stuff. It is the only thing stopping my reading flow here.

For this part here: “Itachi why do you have to be so cold!?” “Aleast try to talk or something!”
Maybe you should insert some dots in the middle to indicate that some time is passing where Itachi is not answering. Or remove the quotation marks in the middle. Currently it reads as if Itachi is answering the second part.

What does 'rate this T' mean? I don't see a reason to rate this anything. (Except maybe something good)

I am looking forward to your next part :)
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naruhina108 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Thanks I'm glad you like it. And yesh true i.should do that (i will after my computer stops bring mean) xD it was funny when i first saw this i was like woah! Also when i meant rated T it is for older audiences but nit bad enough to be under the mature filter
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*Story-of-a-Mind suddenly wonders if her own fanfiction is supposed to be rated 'T', as she still doesn't get the reason why your story should be rated 'T'* :giggle:
Your computer is being mean? Ah I know that problem. How I miss those old fashioned models where a good hit would bring the hard disk back in line. ;) My Laptop tends to make strange noises. It normally does it all the time. So as recently, after some extremely crazy sounds (somewhere between an annoying bee and a starting helicopter)it suddenly went silent, I thought it was now completely broken :giggle:
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naruhina108 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Well it doesnt matter anymore and i dont think so. XD your computer is going crazy! O.O" yeah mine kinda of sucks and hates how it gets so damn hot after like 10 minutes T^T but i'm getting a brand new one on my birthday!~
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So things will soon change for the better ;)
*whispers* I considered buying a new computer too, but don't tell my laptop or it will go more crazy than it is already :giggle:
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naruhina108 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
XD ROTFL *whispers back* I understand *nods* >.>...<.< *looks around* XD and oh! guess what Akatsuki member I'm writing about right now!
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh, is it Zetsu :eager:
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naruhina108 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Noo!...xD maybe
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